Never forget : emotie

Never forget

those who love you

will never leave

nor unlove you

 

those who forget

never saw love

with their own eyes

just words for them

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Comments (18)

  1. aivz

    Beautiful poem, I love it

    July 26, 2014
    1. yayuki

      THank you, I was trying a new poetic form with this

      July 26, 2014
      1. aivz

        wow! your inventing a new form in poetry?

        July 26, 2014
        1. yayuki

          Yes, I try… I already did two others but they were very complicated so I tried to come up with something less strict.. It is fun. You write poetry, too?

          July 26, 2014
  2. peacefulthinking

    yes This IS very true

    July 26, 2014
    1. yayuki

      thank you, I think so, too

      July 26, 2014
  3. mythoughts77

    This is a wonderful thought, awesome poem. Destined to be a classic.

    July 26, 2014
    1. yayuki

      hehe I sure hop it will become one…. I love the classics

      July 26, 2014
  4. shadow-storm

    Hmm… in a sense, true that those who are truly loved have a place in our hearts, but sometimes they do have to leave or choose to leave. It’s a mystery and a tragedy that sometimes to love someone and do what’s best for them means letting go, or sometimes even leaving so they can be free to live their lives.
    Nice form, beautiful idea and thoughts, it is definitely accurate of the hearts’ desire

    July 26, 2014
    1. yayuki

      hehe… it wasn’t the physical leave I had in mind here you are right on that, people are not trees they have to be able to leave and live their lifes never cuts the roots though….
      thank you.. I really gave this form thing some thought, I wanted something simple but with a bit of challenge and balance… I decided on 8 lines because most of the classic forms have 8 lines ( thinking sonnet here ) …
      hm the nature of the of the feeling is puzzling and telling

      July 26, 2014
      1. shadow-storm

        Am thankful true friends leave roots of the relationship to live in our memories
        Heh, yes, the is an enigmatic puzzle sometimes even as it reveals itself through our choices!
        I like the simplicity, it makes remembering the form while composing whatever inspiration is in mind easier.
        Do you mind if I try using your emotie form sometime?

        July 26, 2014
        1. yayuki

          yup , exactly like this
          it is who we are and it becomes what we do
          thanks… sure you can use it for free anytime LOL only if you win a competition then I demand dips … hehe
          poetic forms exist to be used

          July 26, 2014